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Wed Jun 17, 2009, 4:53 AM
Life has been extremely busy for me these past few months. My last update was a reflection of my past writings and how they are a function of myself. Now this update is more or less an update of my life right now.

Things are working out extremely well for me. I'm the undergraduate student senate president now faithfully serving my office in an honorable manner. I'm also a webmaster now at my local campus ministry. I redesigned their website from scratch and its gone through some remarkable revisions. Yesterday a spokesperson from the university administration saw some of my work and inquired more into it. After showcasing my work, she has granted me an internship to design websites for the local high school also. Just when I thought things couldn't go better yesterday I earned 50 dollars on my way home performing two odd jobs. Don't ask how this happened but I ended up installing Florenscent lights in a store I don't work for and I installed DSL internet for a friend of my moms. All of this done in the span of an hour. 50 dollars an hour is pretty good pay rate I'd say.

Well my latest poem is my proudeset creation. It has multiple levels of meaning. If you read it straight though quickly without stopping to ponder, you'd probably say it is a nicely done love poem. However, my poem was written to be more than about romance. This is a poem about a very personal intimate relationship between God and man. The poem is very gender neutral to begin with, so the abstraction allows anyone to find that personal connection. The poem can expound even more meaning if you re-read the poem using the following rule: the rhyming lines of the stanzas can be put together to form couplets, which give rise to better explanations for each line.

Example: lines 2 and 4 of the first stanza together read this:

"beyond the emotion of your sad eyes,
I'm the first to feel the pain of your cries,"

This gives a clue to who the speaker is, someone who is omniscient who can see right into the depths of a person's heart and has immense empathy.

This technique can be done for the entire poem to help put 2+2 together. Reading the poem in its original form the intention is that you look at the stanza as a whole to tell part of the story. When you go to break down individual lines the intention is to connect the story to these couplets that you can make to get my intended meaning.

Thank all who continue to support me, and I'm incredibly sorry for all who have felt abandoned by me this past year. As you can see I'm under a lot of responsibility which doesn't include my school also. I will be submitting some of my other poetry to this in time, since I've written some before this latest one. I hope everyone has an awesome time with life.

  • Mood: Neutral
  • Listening to: background gospel from the secretary
  • Reading: poetryelation.blogspot.com
  • Watching: after the souls of many
  • Playing: no games
  • Eating: sandwhich, grapefruit, and crackers
  • Drinking: water

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  • Current Residence: Greenville, NC
  • Interests: poetry, fractal art, photography
  • Favourite poet or writer: me
  • Favourite photographer: me
  • Operating System: vista, xp, or linux
  • MP3 player of choice: ipod touch
  • Favourite gaming platform: PC

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:iconlilcindylou:
I lush you too munchkin boo

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The richest love is that which submits to the arbitration of time.
:iconthemaskedcrusader:
Thanks for :+fav:ing my CIA uSplash. It's been updated to run with more resolutions!

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:iconlilcindylou:
hi baby, I love you so much. <3

you are my favorite :)

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The richest love is that which submits to the arbitration of time.
:iconlilcindylou:
Hi munchkin, how are you?

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The richest love is that which submits to the arbitration of time.
:iconbellicosebreakfast:
Hey, took a quick look over your stuff and liked what I saw!
Sorry I'm a bit busy at the moment, but I'll try to get around to leaving a few comments sometime in the future!
:iconfly0away0:
your welcome! =)

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:iconmisslorsta:
HEEEYY!

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:iconhumanparadox11:
Thanks for the favorite! ^^

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